Is the story not working? You might need a developmental edit.
Are characters unmotivated?
Is the world you built not coming off like you had hoped?
Developmental editing is what helps you solve those problems.
A developmental edit is similar to a manuscript critique in that it involves reading the manuscript looking for what is going well and what isn’t going so well, but it goes far more in-depth.
I make notes on all the aspects of the craft of writing: conflict, plot (or plot holes!), structure, character motivation and development, setting and description etc.
I'm checking if the story hits or misses critical plot points. Does the story have a saggy middle? Are connections between characters and events working or falling flat?
If the manuscript suffers from "showing versus telling," ineffective dialogue, head hopping or information overload, I give suggestions and comments on ways it could be recrafted.
At the end of developmental edit, the manuscript has comments. Also I provide detailed, manuscript-specific feedback, suggestions, and solutions to all of these issues in a 20–30 page editorial report.
To help you know where to start, I provide a suggested work plan to help guide you through the revisions.
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